我的英文写作练习-part(II)请多多指教

prettymi

因为今天刚上完英文课咩..所以连出了好几篇请大家指教,这帖写多一些好了..ccc:pretty_smile:

老师写的:
The railway in Tokyo is well known to everyone in the world.
But Taiwan Railway’s lunch boxes got lots of attention in the recently lunch-box exhibition in Japan.
The purpose of holding this exhibition is to present the best lunch box to the Japanese public.


米米写的老师改的
(请认识米米的不要笑太大声好吗,thanks)
Tokyo railroad is well known to everyone in the world.
But Taiwan railroad’s lunch boxes got the most attention at the exhibition of lunch box in the Japan lately.
The purpose of the exhibition is to show the best box to Japanese public.